The fic is actually very good. Some minor mistakes, but the freshness of the story, as well the impact it had on me made me forget them... I love the shipping, and I congratulate you I think there was no OOC at any time. The way Yoshino acted, the laziness of Shikamaru and Shikaku hit the spot.
I wish i could know why temari decided she wanted to kill shikamaru, but that0s just a fangirl curiosity....
Loved the litle detail at the end of it.
I would higly recommend this fic, and absolutely belongs to my favorite. Keep on writting!